her hands were
i learned that
our first date
i held out my hand
and she grabbed it
it startled me
her feet were
i learned that
our first night
i spooned her gently
tangling our feet
it startled me
her heart was
i learned that
the hard way
i opened my heart
and she broke it
it startled me
jwturner
4/26/2007
another challenge poem
7 responses so far ↓
JWT // April 25, 2007 at 11:49 pm |
TLW [SVW]… please don’t give me another challenge.
Naughty Heather // April 26, 2007 at 12:42 pm |
Nicely done!
JWT // April 27, 2007 at 5:09 am |
Thanks, Heather.
krkbaker // April 28, 2007 at 4:14 am |
Yeah I do too. I wouldn’t have guessed the direction of it from the title and I love how you describe the adjective, “cold” with three tangible events in a relationship. I do love it when you write. Great job. K
krkbaker // April 28, 2007 at 4:16 am |
Yeah I don’t know what the beginning of that comment meant, I thought Heather was saying , “she liked it”, and so I was agreeing. It doesn’t matter, it’s still good.
JWT // April 28, 2007 at 5:57 am |
You’re cracking me up today! I guess… in truth… I do like the challenges, since they “force” me to write. Hmmm… maybe I should just challenge myself. Now there’s a thought.
The Lovely Wife // April 28, 2007 at 3:50 pm |