Does She Hear Me

Posted on July 31, 2007 | 10 Comments

i say i love you every chance
i get
hoping she can hear
and yet
wondering if my words
are met
with joy or hidden fear
beset
by childhood dreams
unmet
i know she hears and still
i fret

jwturner
in the moment

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10 responses to “Does She Hear Me”

Naughty Heather | July 31, 2007 at 7:58 am | Reply

Love love love this one!
JWT | July 31, 2007 at 3:12 pm | Reply

Heather… thank you. I almost didn’t post it. 🙂
krkbaker | August 1, 2007 at 6:55 am | Reply

this flows nicely.
JWT | August 1, 2007 at 7:00 am | Reply

I can’t figure out how to break out of structure…
krkbaker | August 1, 2007 at 7:30 am | Reply

J-
the only way to do it really is to pick a particular format (traditional) and make your ideas fit into it. it makes poetry like putting a puzzle together.
can be frustrating but sometimes it’s rewarding but not always. and not everything needs structure. some things are good as they are.
you have to put the words together as they come to you, that is your poetic voice and what makes you unique. i thought this was good but then i always like your stuff.
kim
JWT | August 1, 2007 at 7:14 pm | Reply

Kim… I’d really like to get better at this. Where can I go to learn more?
krkbaker | August 2, 2007 at 6:37 am | Reply

I did a post awhile back on the different forms of poetry. It’s a start. Then if you see one you want more info on, I suggest typing it into wikipedia (the writers safety net) Here’s the link: http://nextgr8twriter.wordpress.com/2007/06/04/the-different-forms-of-poetry/
krkbaker | August 2, 2007 at 6:38 am | Reply

great pic btw, you look so happy
K.M.Ryan | August 7, 2007 at 6:52 pm | Reply

i like it. no, i more than like it. i just can’t find a good enough word to express that idea.
JWT | August 7, 2007 at 8:49 pm | Reply

Kim… I am happy. 🙂

K.M. thanks. I think Woody Allen came up with Lurv for these circumstances.